Response to Suggestions for my Essay

After reading the suggestions from another classmate, I realized that he mentioned many areas that I already knew that needed improvement. For example, he said that while my essay was informative, it tended to throw facts at the reader rather than pique the readers interest while enlightening them. He also said that although it was nice to know that I knew what I was talking about from the scholarly way I wrote my essay, he mentioned it would have been nice to know my opinion on the things i was discussing. Perhaps my point of view for this essay was too objective.